Me and family were on a holiday in Scotland. We stayed in a hotel which was adjacent to a very high mountain. Meanwhile my big brother was looking at the wonderful view I asked my family if it was a good idea to climb the mountain. There was a landslide, the whole mountain shook and slowly the ground parted under out feet.After an exausting day we decided to go home early. We travelled back home in a ferry. As soon as we got home me and my family had a rest. After all the trouble we had been through, we decided to go to sleep.
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Well done Haleema what a great story you have also used the little sentence structure in here too well done!
I like the way you have included the prompt in your story Haleema. I am pleased to see you trying to use some adventurous vocabulary. Well done!
I love your use of vocabulary, you have used some very interesting words. I would have liked to have known what happened after the ground parted under your feet – did you fall?
Well done Haleema! I would really like to know if any of your family member fell when the ground parted?