One day there was a boy called noty. Noty never was he was all ways horrid. He was never estatic he was never ajacent. He went in the house he had a dream he woke up but what was pushing him ? He woke up in front of spiders were pushing him untill there he was pushed him for a long time at spider land there were fifty of them and there were not safe he sade carefully now there were lots of am he got scared he woke up at the white bed estatic. He was never horrid ever agian. he had a humongase party and was estatic.
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I am really pleased that you have entered the 100 Word Challenge again Mujahid. I like the idea of a naughty boy who was taught a lesson by the fifty spiders. I’m pleased to see you trying to use some exciting vocabulary in your story. Next time you enter, remember to read back through and check your work. You could always ask someone in your class to help you check your spellings.
Hello Mujahid,
First of all, thank you for highlighting the prompt words. It makes them very easy to see. I can see you have also kept close to the word limit for the prompt. Your class seems to be skilled at doing that.
I’m glad Noty learned a lesson from his experience with the spiders. Being horrid to others is never a good way to live our lives. It’s better to receive smiles for being nice than frowns for being hated.
Remember to reread your story before posting it. It’s so easy to miss mistakes when you have a great idea for a story and want to write it down. “_
Well done! Thanks you for sharing your story. I hope you keep entering the 100WC.
@RossMannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher, NSW, Australia