There once lived a dragon that was very kind but no one knew that because he was a dragon. No one ever thinks dragons are nice. He lived a very painful life where people threw stones and, rocks and pebbles. But one day when he was going outside carrying an umbrella encase of the stones the people brought harder rocks to tear the umbrella apart. Then a little boy who believed in fairytales shouted “stop” he might be a good monster like in my story they became friends and did everything with them and the dragon slowly stirred tea for them all.
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Hi Zara. This was a lovely idea to have a friendly dragon. You have given a very good lesson to everybody too – that we should always take the time to get to know people because they might be friendlier than you think. I’m so glad that your dragon was saved by the little boy.
Have a look at your last sentence again. I think this should really be two sentences – can you work out where the full stop should go?
Hello Zara,
This is a very gentle story about a creature who could be very violent. Thank you so much for sharing your writing on 100WC. I think if you were able to read your story out loud to yourself you would see where you could make a few tweaks to make it even better. Thank you!