Hello, we are going to tell you about HEALTH and how to keep healthy! Do you want to keep healthy or not?
Of course!
You should drink water because it helps your brain think. You should have plenty of rest because it will help you concentrate. You should do plenty of exercise to help you keep fit! You should not eat alot of faty food but one a day would be fine. Remember not to eat to much!
For breakfast you could have cereal like fruitin fibre and pure orange juice. For lunch you could have salaad, cheese in brown bread with apple juice.
Remember to keep healthy, fit because its important!
Hello Aisha and Aleesha, what a great idea to work together on the 100WC. I think that you two did a fabulous job of persuading the reader to be healthy. You made it clear what they had to do and why they had to do it
You also included a rhetorical question and a range of punctuation. Well done.
To make your persuasion even more effective you could add in some emotive language or dare the reader to disagree.
I really enjoyed reading this one. I am guessing that you have learnt about this in school as you included some great facts
Hi Aleesha and Aisha. Thanks for your ‘healthy’ writing. I’m going to show this to nearly 100 Literacy teachers in Bradford soon – Mrs Stones might even be there! Well done again – I’m persuaded – bring on the water!
Aleesha & Aisha,
I thought you piece of work was OUTSTANDING!
Keep up the great work!
From Laura A