It was a bright sunny day and Yusra was feeling hot so she waited for the ice cream van to come. Then when it came she bought two 5 ices one for her and one for Alisha because, she was going to her house. The old man said “This is no ordinary ice cream it is a special ice cream to cool you down.” She went to Alisha’s house and told her the ice cream man said that it was no ordinary ice cream it was made to cool people down, Alisha ate it because she was feeling as hot as a sausage.
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What a great 100WC. I love your comparison of Alisha to a sausage — I have felt that hot a few times myself. I also really appreciated the fact that you had the ice cream man saying the prompt — you are the first I’ve read who did that. Your last sentence is a little long. Try adding a full stop or two — that might make your line about sausage a little more surprising! Great job!