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I like this topic because we never get to write into our books
This is better then how to kill a vampire because it is more creative
Dear Mr Stott,
I stayed there last week and it was awful. There was a broken window and a leaking roof. In the back of the room was a blood stained rug. On the bed lay rats, spiders and cockroaches.
If I was you, I wouldn’t stay.
Room 13 is a room full thrills it’s for adventures people but if your scared of spiders and dracula then don’t go in.
Dear miss Lawton
I stayed there last week and it was nightmare there was broken bed that i was not comfortable when i went to sleep,broken window that made me freezing and blood stains saying i will kill you on the sink there is mice eating rotten cheese that smells. on window sill rats, on the sealing cobwebs with spiders on.
If i was you,i wouldn,t stay.
Great comment Ibrahim,
Try to remember capital I when you are talking about yourself I not i
Take a breath then speak or type
Look at your puncuation it’s all ovber the place and when you said broken window that made me freezing it should sound like the broken windows that made me freeze to death.
You just mist of the S of window it should be windows not window but good stay in room13
Wow! Some brilliant piece of writing I am sure to imitate this in my writing. Keep up the exe lent work. I like the good phrases you use.
I think you should not stay there because the room I stayed in you could hear creepy sounds so that made not go to bed for one whole night and all the other nights something was wrong with them to that is my opinion about the white swan hotel
I think it is a scary experiance however if you go then mybe you’ll be able to feel the scary parts of staying and also the time when you have to go to your bedroom all alone and there’ll be scary noises coming from the window….
If you want to go then heres some advice:
tell anyone you know, cause then in that case when you scream someone will know why!!!
I liked however in your sentence a powerful connective
Zainab your sentence did not make sence at all next time check your work and make sure it makes sence.
Room 13 is a terrible place to stay its got cobwebs all over the place and the bed is very uncomfortable.I am never staying there ever again
Dear mr Stott,
I stayed in Room 13 last week. It was terrified, it has cracked windows, leaky roof and blood under my bed.I couldn’t go to sleep because it was scary.
Dear Miss Lawnton and Mr Stott
Let me give you some advise not to go to room 13 because it is full of creepy and scary things such as the lamps are switching on and of and also the doors are making spooky noise’s .
The window’s are broken to bits and the bed is certinaly not comfatable at all, It is a nightmare in room 13.
There are loads of mice who eat cheese that is rotten and guess what on each wall it say’s I will kill you and soon i went in there I sceamed plus spiders hanging down on the webs everywhere.
If i was you I wouldn’t go ever in there if i was you.
GOOD LUCK but if you never come back don’t blame me it’s your own fault by not listening to me and you’ll be saying you were right.
Don’t come back running and sceaming
Yes yuo shuld becuse it is creepy.Also if yuo stay there yuo will get a good scare and it will be fun becuse i bet yuo have never stayed enywhere where theres a dracula hiding in places where yuo least exspeckt it.And yuo will even get the experince like the exsperince people get when they live in honted houses.
Dear mr stott
I stayed in the White swan hotel last week. The room I stayed wasn’t very pleasant, it had cobwebs dangling of the wall, scary noises, which keep you up half of the night, broken window, that me freeze to death, mice that nibble on your toes when your in bed, ripped curtains, smelly bed sheet, broken bed and worst of all no toilet. So you better change your mind quickly.
I think it is a scary expariance if yuo stay the yuo migh be able to feel the creepynas.But i think yuo shuold stay there because when i stayed there i loved but the ownly few stuff that is scary is that the window is smashed and the bed is not cunftebale but apart from that nuthing else is bad.
Room 13 is awful a good nights sleep would be wasted,
the room is full of spiders the bed is uncomfortable also the doors creak all night because they do not close.
I would not stay i don’t think you would.
Of course you should stay there…..if you like thrills. When I went there I tried to ignore the thunder by putting some music on, but then, in the middle of the night, I woke up again and I heard the door creaking and some bones crunching under heavy feet…..
I knew that the staff had told me it was safe but it didn’t seem it. It looked as if there was a GHOST linking arms with a VAMPIRE… I was truly terrified but then I remembered my survival kit and threw a handful of garlic at the vampire, and, as the vampire was linking arms with the ghost they both ran for their lives.
It was the best experience of my life. But if you get nightmares easily…this room is NOT for you.
last week i had visited the white swan hotel i had room 13 as i opened the door i saw a old raggy curtions and red blood stains as i sat on the bed it broke and it was midnight a mouse had bite 1 of my best toe i screamed!!!! but know one heard me it was scary!
If i was you don’t go to room 13 if you do i feel sorry for ya
good luck bye have a good evening.
Good advice Haris – you must remember I not i though. Capitals are also needed at the start of the sentence!
i like this topic because we hardly write in our books and i liked the lesson when we built the model of room13
i stayed there last week and i will never stay there again because there was blood stains every where and one said beware.the food was rotten with blood in it.the bed was broken.at night i heard noises and i couldn,t get to sleep.i was starving because i din,t eat anything.i could hear foot steps.the window was broken and the sink was making a kind of ratling noise.i wouldn,t stay there if i was you
I think it is a scary experience in room 13 and I think there are very scary and frightining sounds…..
Beaware if you are scared of dracula or spider’s you will feel horrified I’ve got a good advice do not enter room 13!!!!
I like the word beware and i like your short story
Dear miss Lawson i stayed in room 13 yesterday and it was horrible.the food was rotten and it had blood stains on it.the room was horribly decorated with spiders and blood.one blood stain said beware.the bed was broken and it was so uncomfortable.at night i was hearing noises like the sink was rattling, footsteps and a bell ringing.the window was smashed in to pieces.it was so windy.the room was filthy and dusty.i was starving because i didn’t eat any thing.if i was you i wouldn’t stay there.
Remember your capital letters and a very good blog about room 13
Dont you dare even think about room 13 for even 10 seconds, you will scare your pant’s of its extremely creepy.It has a leaky roof,smashed windows,spiders,snakes and dead body’s of humans and a lot more creepy things.
At 12 a clock midnight vampires will appear and bite you in the neck AND YOU WILL BECOME A VAMPIRE FOR EVER!
THE ONLY WAY TO SURVIVE IS DONT BOOK A ROOM AT NUMBER :13DONT BOOK AT THE WHITE SWAN HOTEL
THEY WILL LIE TO YOU AND DONT FALL FOR THEIR TRAPS
Dont you dare even think about room 13 for even 10 seconds, you will scare your pant’s of its extremely creepy.It has a leaky roof,smashed windows,spiders,snakes and dead body’s of humans under the creepy floor board and a lot more creepy things.
At 12 a clock midnight vampires will appear and bite you in the neck AND YOU WILL BECOME A VAMPIRE FOR EVER!
THE ONLY WAY TO SURVIVE IS DONT BOOK A ROOM AT NUMBER :13 DONT BOOK AT THE WHITE SWAN HOTEL
AND BY THE WAY THE HOTEL’S RATING IS NOT EVEN A HALF A STAR
IT WAS THE WORST HOTEL THAT I HAD EVER STAYED IN ALL MY LIFE
BY HAMZA GS
Because it is haunted no,would you like to stay in a horrible room infested with spiders and rats, I dont if your going to stay there YOU WILL REGRET IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!
In the misterious room there are lots of spiders and lots of bats they swamp down
and then suck your blood up then u will turn in to a vampire ,there a lots of
vampires and zombies if u are scared dont go in !!!!!
No i would not even dare its creepy and spooky
You need capital I not i Saphia, what was so scary about Room 13?
If i was you i wouldnt wont to stay there , i stayed there once it was horrible, ripped curtains, brocken windows, creaking doors, and brocken beds . Every night i couldnt get to sleep the tap just kept dripping and every night i could hear footsteps walking towards me. And they didnt chose a good place to build it. Its right near a grave yard. Plus the food wasnt even good there was a fang on top of my bun instead of a cherry and i found a spider in my sandwich. Nearly all the people i know have stayed there and after that they never showed up………………
I even went to thier house to find out where the had gone of to but no one knew so if i was you i wouldnt go because its sort of terryfying.
Some good advice Rabia. Plurals like windows and noises don’t need an apostrophe. A very informative and humorous blog post!
Do you want a creepy and haunted experience then I would go to room 13 at the White swan hotel. If not then stay away and be aware that if you do go DONT GO ON YOUR OWN!
I stayed at room 13 it was terrible there was a leaking roof, smashed window, broken floorboards.
I had to sleep on the floor because the bed was spikey and uncomtable.
At night i could hear a bell and i could see shadws.
Dear Mr Stott
Whatever youd do, DO NOT stay in room 13 it is absolutely horrifying! There was shattered glass and gloomy ripped walpaper; there was also giant rats scurrying around it was spine chilling. When I was going to bed i found a deformed dead person under the covers! There was blood stains on the carpet and the bath was full of blood and butchered limbs! I have alredy sued the place however i don’t think they got my letter yet so NEVER even go within 100 yards of that phsycotic room 13!
A very good description Yousaf I liked it it was intresting and I liked some words that you typed in
Dear Mr Stott,
What ever you do , do NOTstay in room13 because it is horrifying. Last night I stayed there the rats chewed my socks like a lion. There as an absolute terryfying wallpaper in the world. This horrible noise heard like a funeral. On the walls it said beware. The window was blood stained. There was a bath full of blood.
Dear Mr Stott i wouldn’t stay in room 13 its the most petriffiying room ever its got cobwebs and spiders everywhere.Its creepy and the window bangs at night against the wall.If I`d have known that room 13 is a terrible place to stay i wouldn’t have stayed!
Mr Stott if I was you i wouldn’t
go and stay in room 13 here`s a couple of reasons why 1 reason why is because at night you hear a creepy creaking door sound and footsteps then the next day when I woke up there was blood stains on my door and outside on the floor.The 2nd reason why I wouldn’t stay at room 13 is because you can hear a spooky bell chiming at night and when you first see the hotel you don`t see a bell tower………
Do not stay in room 13 because its very scary and terrible. All the windows where smashed and the pieces of the broken glass were scattered on the floor. The floor boards were creaking and underneath of the floorboards, where there was a big hole underneath it, there was a skeleton seen. The curtains were all dusty. When i heard a knock on the door i opened it and nobody was there, it happened repeatedly but the same thing kept happening, it was very creepy. There were rats scattering around the wooden floors. There were cobwebs on the corner of my roof. The wallpaper were half ripped and there was blood of stains found. The room seemed like as if somebody got murdered and died there. At night you could hear weird noises which gave a shiver down my spine.
Dear Miss Lawton and Mr Stott
Can i give you some advise about room 13 it is a haunted room you would ever see in your life so, as you know if you had slept there you would hear knocking on the door but when you open it nobody is there.At midnight the clock would ring DING DONG DEW,you would be with sweat and your heart is beating really fast you would feel to escape but no all the corridor lights are switch off everyone is enjoying there sleep except from you YOUR SLEEP is no good.If you want a haunted night or have nightmares which you don`t really have then LISTEN TO YOUR HEART OF THE BEAT. Well as you know it is your opinion if i was in your place i would scream and cry for a friend.Now it`s your opinion i have given you my advice now you are listening to 6GS and 6DL opinion you will have to chose.
Dear Mr Stott and Miss lawton
Do not stay in room 13 because it is to terrifying. If you do you will be scared.and frighten.
please do not stay .In the room there are broken windows .And next to the bed idsa sink .
At 12;00 clock at midnight my hair stuck up like fear.
Dear Mr Stott
I think you should’nt stay in room 13 because it’s awful. theres a broken mirror, cobwebs and old broken four poster bed. The romours about dracula freak you out aswell. My opinion is don’t stay there unless your willing to take a risk
Dear Mr Stott
I personally think you should not stay there whatever you do. This truly, evil twisted room has abroken mirror, torn wallpaper and a broken four poster bed. When i went to lie down it was really uncomfortable, I lifted up the bedsheet and I was truly petrified at what I saw. It was deformed kind of persson with some bite marks on his/her neck. That could only lead to one thing. no it could’nt be. The rumours about dracula were real. Thats why i sent you this letter. I hope you get it as soon as possible and remember whatever you do DO NOT stay in Room 13.
Lovely sentence structure Azhar, remember to use capitals though (for I as well). I think I will avoid Room 13 based on your information.
Azhar I really like the words that you have used in your discription!!!
They are truly WOW!!
Dear Mr Stott
If I was you I wouldn’t stay there. I heard banging and clashing outside in the corridor as the clock struck 12:00.
Somebody knocks on your door but when you answer it, nobody is there. The room is haunted . I lied down in my ripped 4 poster bed.It was really uncomfortable. As I fell asleep, a loud bang echoed through my room. I woke up with a terrible sight. A ghostly pirate went through the wall and through the window. Because I was so scared, I left and went home. I wouldn’t dare stay.
Dear Miss Lawton
I have some really good advice for you to not stay in room 13.I could not sleep. There were spiders all over the place, cobwebs in the corner of the room. The air smelt damp and there were terrible noises like a door creeking. It was quiet weird because I woke up at midnight after hearing a knock at the door but when I opend the door there was nobody there.In the room there was a broken window which leaked all the time you would need a big bucket .you would be suprised because the weather would be beautiful and dry outside but there still would be water leaking in to the room.You would not want to stay there after reading about my experience.
IF you stay in room 13 it is spookey also the bed is not confeteable the window is broken floorboard is cracked the people are shouting you will not able to sleep
Nice work usman i like the bit when you said the windows and the floorbords are broken keep it up …
Do,not stay at the White Swan Hotel in room 13 because there are crackes in the windows, spider webs, mice, rats, big bugs, broken bed and broken mirror
so whatever you do,do not stay in room 13 dont be scared!!!!!!!!!!
Great use of commas Reyan – I know this is one of your writing targets! Remember to only use one ! at the end of your writing though.
i would advise you not to stay at room 13 because you would have a terrifying night as there are a lot of cobwebs and spiders also room 13 is haunted,you would have the worst night of your life.The windows are broken,you can hear wolfs howling , you also would not have good night sleep also the doors are always creaking and one last thing i would like to say is don’t stay at room 13
Great advice Hajira, I like how you have used blue words in your writing too. When you type, remember capital I not i when you are referring to yourself.
Thanks for the advise I will remember for next time
Dear Mr Stott,
I wouldn’t recomend The White Swan Hotel, it is a frightening place to be and this would lead to the least favourite hotel. The staff are unappropriated in many ways such as not well mannered, they attack guest and frigheten them. They have unsutabile rooms such as room 13.
Room 13 is a very uncomfortable place to stay and there customers would not like to stay there for their holiday. The room is invested with insects and other creepy creatures . There is also dripping blood on the walls and there is rotting flesh scattered across the floor.
When the clock strikes 10pm a mysterious figure would appear on the walls. At 11pm a strange noise would be heard and a black shadow would glide accross the room. At midnight the door would swing open and black spooky portale would suck every little thing into a different dimension. At 1am the rooom would return in to pig-style. If you like these mysterious thing BOOK NOW!!!
If I were you l wouldn’t dare stay in room 13 because it’s horrific.Especially when DRACUIA pays you a visit ! It’s only for thrill seekers and people who are up for challenges. My opinion would be to stay and enjoy at home, that would be better than room 13. It’s terrible ……..extremely terrible.If you want to come back sleepy,be delighted to.
love it keep it up love the words horific aznd thrill seekers keep it up zahra!!!
Fom my experience in room 13 i would advise you not to stay in room 13. the conditions in which you have to live in are horrible and not at all respectable. The room is infested with cobwebs and spiders and the light keeps flickring on and off because it’s haunted.it has blood splaterd everywere the wall is all dirty and the wallpaper is all ripped off.
Nice work zakkee keep it up
Dear mr stott
I wouldn’t stay in room 13 it’s the most petreyfiying room anywhere.I stayed there last week I was just about to faint on looking at the state and thinking how I would spend the night there.It had blood stained curtains holes all over the wall and no carpet.In the middle of the night I kept hearing horrible noises. Some of them reminded me of you shouting.All of a sudden someone knocked on the door… anxiouly i walked towards the neglected door. It was just my food service providing my breakfast.Dont stay there
Wow – sounds awful! Good use of the words petrifying and neglected (from Reading Circuit?) too. I don’t think I’ll book a room in The White Swan Hotel, thanks for the tips.
Remember to put a space after your full stops at the end of your sentences
Dear Miss Lawton please DO NOT stay in room 13 because it is very scary and when you go to sleep you will hear doors knocking footsteps walking .When I sated there last week I wouldn,t go back there I tried to switch rooms but I couldn,t all the other rooms were full and when I was there I saw walking shadow.It was the most terrifying night of my life.There was another door saying PLEASE DO NOT ENTER! I wouldn,t recomend room 13 it is petrifying.
Last week i had visited the White Swan hotel it was terrifying there were broken windows i was frozen the walls were really soggy and their was a hole on the floor all of the rain was coming inside because of the broken windows i saw scary pictures on the wall. When i went to bed i couldn’t go to sleep because the bed was that cold and i could hear the wind whistling. So i suggest Miss Lawton and Mr Stott that you don’t go because it was awful.
Zainab i really like your discription
usman your spelling is not good because you spelt comfortable conferteble and no full stops.
Lovely feedback to Usman but Ibrahim you need to show you can use full stops and capitals before you say that someone else hasn’t used them.
The assembley was abouserloutly fantastic!
……But room 13 sounds scary……
I’m glad you liked our assembly Sophia – you will read all about Room 13 next year in Year 6! Use a dictiionary to help you with your spellings on some difficult words when you write on the blog (assembly & absolutely).
Thanks for the good advice , I will remember that advice for the next time I go to Whitby!!!!!!!!!!!!!
no because you hear scary noises that make you jump out of your bed there is no safety at night time you mostly find vampires near the white swan hotel
Remember capital letters for the names of places; The White Swan Hotel. Otherwise keep up the good work Aaniya!
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